The twelve templates sit right below this line, and we sorted them by the situation that puts a reason in your hands today. Take the one that matches what just happened to your prospect, paste it, change the first line. The template gives you nothing until you know why you are writing to this person this week, which is exactly why we sorted them this way rather than by industry.
(and yes, you are going to scroll straight past this paragraph. Go ahead.)
Table of contents
Each one answers a different trigger. Copy the block, swap the variables in double curly braces, and rewrite the first line so it names something that happened to them rather than something true about you.
You are already thinking that twelve templates is eleven too many, and that you will use one of them. Correct. Pick the trigger you can spot reliably this month and ignore the other eleven until you can spot those too.
Use it in the first eight weeks, while they still have permission to change how things run.
your first 90 days
Hi {{first_name}}, you took over {{team}} at {{company}} three weeks ago, so you are probably still deciding what to keep and what to rebuild. Everyone we speak to in that seat inherits a {{process}} nobody documented and nobody defends. We help teams sort that in the first quarter rather than the third, so the numbers you present in month three come from something you trust. Worth ten minutes while you still have room to change things? Alex
Why it works. It writes to the window rather than to the person, and the window closes.
Where the first line comes from. Their profile update on socials, plus the welcome post their new team publishes the same week.
Use it when the title changed but the company did not, so their scope grew overnight.
congrats on the step up
Hi {{first_name}}, congratulations on the move to {{new_title}}. The people I speak to after that step say the same thing: they now own a number they used to influence, and the old tooling reports it badly. If {{metric}} sits on your side of the table now, I can send you what two teams your size changed in their first quarter, in one email, no call attached. Does that land anywhere near your priorities? Alex
Why it works. It treats the promotion as a change in responsibility rather than as a compliment.
Where the first line comes from. The promotion post on socials, and the title change on their profile.
Use it two to six weeks after the announcement, once the congratulations stop arriving.
the quarter after funding
Hi {{first_name}}, {{company}} closed {{round}} last month. The pressure changes shape after a round: you have budget, and a board that asks what the budget bought by the next meeting. The teams that answer that well usually fix {{problem}} before they hire against it, because a new hire inherits the same broken input. I can show you what that looked like for a company at your stage. Does that match your next three months? Alex
Why it works. It writes about the pressure the round creates instead of congratulating them on the round.
Where the first line comes from. The funding announcement, the press page, and the founder's own post.
Use it the week the job goes live, because a job posting says out loud what a team cannot cover today.
the role you posted
Hi {{first_name}}, you opened a {{role_title}} role this week, which usually means {{problem}} landed on someone's plate and stayed there. That hire takes three months to arrive and two more to ramp, so the gap runs until roughly {{month}}. We cover exactly that ground for teams waiting on the person they just posted for. Happy to send you what the first month looks like. Is that gap a real problem right now? Alex
Why it works. The posting proves the problem, so you never have to argue that it exists.
Where the first line comes from. Their careers page, plus the job boards their recruiters post on.
Use it within a few days, while the thing they read still sits in their head.
the thread you commented on
Hi {{first_name}}, you left a comment on {{post_topic}} last week, so the question sits somewhere on your list. Most people who ask it have already tried the obvious fix and watched it hold for about a quarter. We take a different route, and I would rather show you where our route breaks than sell you the version that never breaks. Two minutes of reading, no call. Want me to send it? Alex
Why it works. It starts from something they said in public, so the first line survives a sceptical read.
Where the first line comes from. Comments and reactions on posts in your category across socials.
Use it when they wrote the brief themselves, which happens more often than most teams notice.
your post on {{topic}}
Hi {{first_name}}, your post about {{problem}} described the exact thing three of our customers wrote to us about last year. Every one of them tried {{obvious_fix}} first, and it bought them a quarter. What held after that took about a week to set up and needed no extra headcount. I can write it up in five lines and send it whether or not we ever speak. Would you read that? Alex
Why it works. You quote their own words back, so nobody has to guess what keeps them busy.
Where the first line comes from. Their own posts on socials, filtered by the words your buyers use for the problem.
Use it in the first fortnight, when they research the category rather than the vendors.
you joined {{group_name}}
Hi {{first_name}}, you joined {{group_name}} this month, which usually means you research {{topic}} on purpose rather than read about it by accident. Everyone at that stage asks me the same three questions, and the answers bore people enough that nobody writes them down properly. I can send all three in one message, no strings on it. What are you trying to work out at the moment? Alex
Why it works. Joining a community marks the start of research, which sits earlier than any vendor comparison.
Where the first line comes from. Member lists and join notifications in the groups your buyers gather in.
Use it about a month in, when the announcement turns into work nobody planned for.
the {{market}} launch
Hi {{first_name}}, {{company}} announced {{launch}} a few weeks ago. Every team we work with hits the same wall around week six: the new market needs its own pipeline, and the playbook that works at home returns almost nothing there. We helped a company your size build the second one without doubling the team. I can send the outline by email, no call. Does that sit on your list this quarter? Alex
Why it works. It names what happens after the announcement, which nobody else writing to them bothers with.
Where the first line comes from. Press pages, product changelogs, and the launch posts their team shares.
Use it when a peer they recognise moved first, since that carries further than any claim you make.
what {{peer_company}} changed
Hi {{first_name}}, {{peer_company}} moved {{process}} in-house last quarter and stopped paying for {{cost_line}}. You sell into the same market at roughly the same size, so the same arithmetic probably applies to you. I can send you what they changed in their own words, with the parts that went wrong left in, because those are the useful parts. It reads in two minutes. Useful before your next planning cycle? Alex
Why it works. Peer proof from a company they recognise beats every claim you could make about yourself.
Where the first line comes from. Your own case studies, plus public announcements from companies in their segment.
Use it when the connection is real and you can name what you did together.
{{mutual_name}} said to write
Hi {{first_name}}, {{mutual_name}} and I worked on {{project}} together, and your name came up when we talked about {{topic}}. {{mutual_name}} mentioned you had circled the same problem for a while. I will not pretend that makes us close. It does mean I know roughly what you deal with, and I can send you what we built over there. Should I copy {{mutual_name}} in so you can check? Alex
Why it works. The connection carries the credibility, so the email itself does not have to.
Where the first line comes from. Shared connections on socials, and a two-line check with the person before you write.
Use it when their stack tells you which ceiling they will hit and roughly when.
you run {{tool_name}}
Hi {{first_name}}, {{company}} runs {{tool_name}}, which tells me how you handle {{process}} today. Teams on that setup hit the same ceiling once {{condition}}, then patch around it with spreadsheets for six months before anyone says it out loud in a meeting. We replaced that spreadsheet for {{peer_company}}. I would rather send you one screenshot than describe it badly. Have you reached that point yet? Alex
Why it works. Their stack tells you which problem they already accepted and which one still waits for them.
Where the first line comes from. Technology detection tools, job posts that name the stack, and their engineering blog.
Use it within 48 hours, and say plainly that you are guessing about who read the page.
you stopped by twice
Hi {{first_name}}, someone at {{company}} read our {{page_topic}} page twice this week. I have no idea whether that was you or a colleague, so forgive the guess. If your team looks at {{problem}} right now, I can send the two things people always want after that page: the pricing without the form, and what the first month looks like in practice. Want both? Alex
Why it works. It admits the guess, which turns the tracking into honesty rather than into something creepy.
Where the first line comes from. Your website visitor identification, matched against your ICP before anyone writes a word.
Here is the rule, and everything below follows from it. You change angle every time instead of repeating the first message louder. Four touches, four different reasons to reply, and the last one hands them an easy exit.
(the "just bumping this to the top of your inbox" email has never earned a reply in the history of email. We both know it.)
Follow-up 1 · Day 3 · Angle: give something away
the short version
Hi {{first_name}}, nothing to answer here. I said I would send the short version, so here it is: the teams your size that fixed {{problem}} changed what enters the list, not how much they send. It took about a week and no new headcount, and the first month looked worse before it looked better. Keep it whether or not we ever speak. Does any of that match your setup? Alex
Follow-up 2 · Day 7 · Angle: change the problem
wrong problem maybe
Hi {{first_name}}, different angle, since the first one clearly missed. I wrote to you about {{problem}}, which may sit nowhere near your desk this quarter. The teams that skip that email usually wrestle with {{other_problem}} instead, and we handle that one too, from the other end. Rather than guess a third time, I will ask you straight. Which of the two is closer to your week? Alex
Follow-up 3 · Day 12 · Angle: peer proof
one example then I stop
Hi {{first_name}}, one company, then I stop with the examples. {{peer_company}} sells into your market and rebuilt {{process}} last quarter. What moved the numbers was the list, not the copy, which surprised them and cost them a month of testing the wrong thing. I can send the write-up in their words, including what failed. Want me to send it over? Alex
Follow-up 4 · Day 20 · Angle: close the door and leave the handle on
closing the loop
Hi {{first_name}}, I will stop writing after this one, which I suspect reads as good news. If the timing was the problem rather than the subject, say the word and I will come back in {{month}} with whatever we learned between now and then. Otherwise you will not hear from me again and no hard feelings either way. Should I put {{month}} in the diary? Alex
Gojiberry finds your leads
Every template on this page needs a first line that only works if you know what just happened. Gojiberry watches more than 30 buying signals, picks the accounts worth your time, and tells you why.
Get your first leads for freeOne inbox, one Tuesday morning. Sarah runs growth at a 40-person B2B software company. Three emails land within two hours of each other, all from companies selling roughly the same thing.
Version 1 · the generic one
Hi there, I hope this email finds you well. We help B2B SaaS companies build more pipeline through our platform. Would you have 15 minutes this week to discuss how we could support your growth goals?
Version 2 · personalised by hand
Hi Sarah, I came across your profile and saw you lead growth at Northbound. We help companies like Northbound build more pipeline. Would you have 15 minutes this week?
Version 3 · a signal triggered it
Hi Sarah, you posted on Thursday about rebuilding the outbound list every Monday morning. Three of our customers described that exact Monday before they changed what feeds the list rather than what sends it. I can send you what they changed, in five lines, no call. Is Monday still where it hurts?
Version two proves that somebody looked her up. Version three proves that somebody read what she wrote, and Sarah tells those two apart in about a second.
The variable field in version two carries no information she did not already have. The first line in version three carries a fact she recognises as hers, which is the only reason she keeps reading.
And the last line does the real work: it asks about her problem instead of her calendar. Nothing else changed between the two. Same product, same length, same sender.
1. The subject line
Three to five words, lower case, no emoji. It should read like something a colleague fires off between meetings, not like something a campaign produced.
(if it announces a sale, they already deleted it)
2. The first line
It proves you know who you write to, and it never mentions you. Name the thing that happened, in their words, dated.
(this is the only line worth spending real time on)
3. The body
One observation about their situation, one sentence of value, and then you stop. Every extra sentence costs you a reply.
(no attachment, no deck, no calendar link)
4. The close
One question, about their problem. Never a demo request, never two options, never "let me know your thoughts".
(a question they can answer in four words beats a question that needs a diary)
On length: 50 to 100 words. Short sentences. Read the whole thing out loud before you send it, and cut every sentence you stumble over, because your reader stumbles there too. If you want a starting draft to cut down, our free cold email generator writes one for you in a few seconds.
None of the twelve templates survives a spam folder. Do these five before your first send.
You also need a tool that sends and rotates properly, which is a separate decision from everything above. We put the two most common candidates side by side in Smartlead vs Lemlist, and if neither fits your budget or your client setup, we priced the best Smartlead alternatives against their own public pages.
Write to the right people and get >30% reply
Someone in your market just changed jobs or started following a competitor. Gojiberry spots it, checks they match your ICP, and tells you before anyone else writes.
Get your first leads for freeStart with somebody else's number. Apollo analysed cold outreach to executives and reported that around 8 percent of those emails drew a meaningful response. That figure belongs to Apollo, it comes from their own data, and we quote it because it is the closest thing to a published baseline that anyone will attach their name to.
Every other number you meet on this topic swings wildly. Apollo's own benchmark pages put the average somewhere between 3 and 5 percent while listing top-quartile results in the 15 to 25 percent range, and other analyses of millions of emails land closer to 2 percent. A reply rate with no market, no list and no sample size attached tells you nothing, which is why we will not put one in a table and call it a benchmark.
So here is ours instead, with the name and the link on it. Mindflow runs intent-based outbound with Gojiberry and reports a 31 to 35 percent reply rate on those campaigns, with 21 percent of replies turning into MQLs. They target CISOs and security leads, they built the pipeline on our API, and they wrote down what they changed in our Mindflow case study.
(one company, one market, enterprise cybersecurity, roughly a 25,000 euro contract value. Your market will do something else, and anyone who promises you the same number has not read their own case study.)
The gap between 8 percent and 31 percent does not come from better writing. Mindflow stopped sending to lists that matched their ICP on paper and started writing only to people who had just done something: engaged with a competitor's post, complained about alert fatigue, mentioned the category by name.
Same product, same team, same templates. Different people in the "to" field.
Between 50 and 100 words. Every template on this page sits inside that range on purpose.
Short sentences beat clever ones, and one idea beats three. If you need a second paragraph to explain the first, cut the first and start again from the observation about them.
Read it out loud before you send it. Anywhere you stumble, your reader stumbles too, and their version of stumbling is closing the tab.
Apollo analysed cold outreach to executives and reported around 8 percent drawing a meaningful response, which is the most quotable published figure out there. Their benchmark pages elsewhere put the general average nearer 3 to 5 percent.
Treat all of it loosely. The numbers circulating online swing from 2 percent to 25 percent depending on the market, the list and how the author counts a reply.
For a reference point with a name attached, Mindflow reports 31 to 35 percent on intent-based campaigns. That is one company in one market, not a benchmark you should hold yourself to.
Four, spread across roughly three weeks, and each one takes a different angle. The sequence on this page runs day 3, day 7, day 12 and day 20.
The count matters far less than the variety. Four follow-ups that repeat the first email perform worse than one follow-up that offers something new, because repetition tells the reader you have nothing else.
Stop at four. A fifth message converts almost nobody and costs you the domain reputation you spent three weeks building.
In most places, yes, for business-to-business outreach, as long as you follow the rules of the jurisdiction you write into.
In the United States, CAN-SPAM permits cold email when you use accurate headers, include a physical postal address and honour an unsubscribe request promptly. In the European Union, GDPR permits B2B outreach under legitimate interest when you identify yourself, explain how you found the address and offer an easy opt-out.
Some countries add stricter rules, and a few treat sole traders as individuals rather than as businesses. Check the market you sell into, and take a lawyer's view rather than ours before you scale.
No. Personalise the first line and leave the rest of the template alone.
Hand-personalising the whole message takes ten minutes per prospect and produces a message that reads exactly like the templated one, because the value never came from the extra sentences.
Spend that time upstream instead, on choosing who receives the email. A trigger you can spot reliably does more for your reply rate than an afternoon of rewriting paragraphs.
Use the structure as it stands. Rewrite the first line every single time.
The body, the length and the closing question all transfer without changes, and swapping the variables handles the rest. That part of the work is done.
The first line carries the whole email, and it only works when it names something that happened to that specific person. A first line you copied word for word is the fastest way to make a good template look like a bad one.
The usual advice says Tuesday to Thursday, early morning in the recipient's time zone. It holds well enough as a default, and you lose little by following it.
The trigger beats the calendar every time. An email about a funding round lands better on the Saturday after the announcement than on the perfect Tuesday three weeks later.
So send within days of the signal, then optimise the hour once you have enough volume to measure it properly. Most teams tune the hour long before they fix the reason for writing.
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